Guest host for January 8 & 9 for JusJoJan is Dan @ No Facilities. The word for the 8th was mongrel suggested by Geoff @TanGentle; the prompt for January 9 is power, suggested by Erica @ 20/20 hines sight.
Last time I wrote an uplifting story about “the kindness of strangers.” My story about power comes from my darker side. It’s flash noir: bleak with no happy ending. Just so as you know. Read with caution.
When did she ever feel like she had power; real control over her life. Never.
From narrow parents’ bed to marriage bed. The pain of first penetration; the pain of first birth.
His decisions; his demands; his pleasures; his rewards.
She was ground down to nothing; a mongrel in the streets had more.
The children fled when they were able. They despised their mother – he made them so.
Life was always pain and fear of pain; she merely survived each day.
That day, there was blood everywhere.
The neighbours knew he beat her but this much blood.
It coated the front step, the front windows. smeared on the door.
They found her with a bucket, “cleaning”, she said. “Not clean enough he demanded so I’m cleaning.”
Cleaning with blood. They couldn’t make her stop. “I have to finish before he comes home.”
By the amount of blood, they doubted he had left that day.
(c) Lorraine
January 10, 2017 at 12:29 pm
Wow!
This is one hell of an excellent piece of writing.
Powerful. Intense. Well written. and it conveys the depth of emotions, feelings and experiences – the translation is stunning.
(you shouldn’t be afraid of your “darker side” – it seems to me, after all this time, that as I read your words, they are pushing at you, because they just want you to express and intensity of emotions and feelings – that are within you. perhaps the “themes” are just the words needed to let the rush out, even if they aren’t your personal experiences; and maybe, this is part of what you need in your own “healing way” – hell, maybe, I realize this in the moment as I comment, that this is what I need too? I don’t know, but what I do know is that each time you write straight-up, no frills, it’s intense and really rings the bell. this isn’t to say that your other works and efforts aren’t equally wonderful, good etc. – but perhaps it’s the “game” of giving voice to all the differences that makes it all work out in the end.)
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January 9, 2017 at 5:54 pm
very powerful post
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January 9, 2017 at 6:18 pm
Thank you. Intense I know.
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