two quick writes for mlmm wordle 257:
[proprioception]
I pretend maybe
lifetimes/lifelines
of cicatrix
are only crumbs
upon my tongue
basking in the
last luminous
mix of original
and sin
[proprioception luxuria]
the cicatrix of
your tongue
against my skin
lasting/lashing
like luminous crumbs
original sin
of sweat and sex
mixing, spilling
back arching, basking
for a lifetime of pretend
and maybe
your finger traces
deeper wounds than these
wordle word list: cicatrix (the scar of a healed wound; a scar on the bark of a tree; in botany, a mark on a stem left after a leaf or other part has become detached); proprioception kinesthesia; the body’s ability to sense movement, action, and location); basking; crumbs; tongue; maybe; lifetime; last; luminous; original; mix; pretend
images: pexel on pixabay
quick writes are brief sketches, jotted down in a short space of time and lightly edited
September 14, 2021 at 5:39 pm
I like both of them – in equal measure, but of course, if I were to choose, I’d choose the 2nd for the more intense flavour …. but together they share and interesting relationship and dynamic, and then each alone, is also very entrancing ….
I have to say, I really loved the last line of the second – that’s an altogether very powerful closing …. it lingers, leaving its imprint (on the skin) … in the mind ….
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September 14, 2021 at 5:44 pm
actually, let me rephrase that …. for a lifetime of pretend … etc. that’s where the ending really cinches it!
ooof! and wow …. very cool – and it’s even more effective, I think, because those words just before … mixing, spilling/ back arching, basking …. they tone (the actual sound of them, how we pronounce/read them) is rather short and clipped – and the pace they set, by their placement and definitions, and then of course, personal, more intimate meanings, is such a fascinating and “S-curve compliment” to the next …. for a lifetime of pretend ….
oh yeah, oh yeah …. I’m “marking” this one for my come back to it and absolute delight in these pieces ….
😌👏👏
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September 15, 2021 at 3:20 am
Thanks. I haven’t ventured into po.etry much of late. Your praise is very much appreciated.
When I was reading the wordle list, phrases and words came to mind — perhaps some of it was word association. Not sure I set out to write po.ems; but they flowed onto the “page” as if that’s what they wanted. After I wrote the first, there were still images, fantasies, thoughts not completed by the first.
I’ll be back to finish this off . . .
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September 15, 2021 at 11:53 am
no worries or hurries …. and yeah, sometimes the words end up setting their own form, and that’s just fine – actually, it’s probably the best thing we can, as creative artists/writers is to let it happen … as the saying of “the heart wants what it wants” – so too, do the words. :)
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September 16, 2021 at 8:04 am
Yes. I don’t visit the po,em based challenges any more for that reason. I should challenge myself at times, but . . . Let the words form and shape themsevles . ..
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September 16, 2021 at 3:00 pm
and that is exactly as it should be …. follow your own heart’s calling and direction …. :)
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September 18, 2021 at 7:00 am
that is good advice; the process can be rather scarey.
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September 13, 2021 at 9:50 am
Beautiful ❤️
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September 14, 2021 at 3:11 pm
Thank you.
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September 13, 2021 at 6:41 am
Beautiful and sensuous 💜
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September 14, 2021 at 3:09 pm
Thanks. I was trying for sensous!
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September 14, 2021 at 3:11 pm
Well you got that 💜
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