My 2nd ever quadrille (wet whisper my first) for Björn’s dawn quadrille #25 for d’verse. Late to the party, but snuck in any ways.
as you finger trace
the contours of my
undulating scars,
puckered skin snaking
red pink cross my wrists
the dawn light falls
on me – knowledge
that all your wounds lie
inward, uncounted,
protected
untouched by my
being held so close in
your arms
image via pixabay.com (minivanily)
© Lorraine
Lorraine's frilly freudian slip 
February 4, 2017 at 4:52 pm
The deepest scars are often hidden, underneath ~ Enjoyed this one ~ Nice to meet you at D’verse ~
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February 4, 2017 at 8:47 pm
Thank you Grace.
I think we only let people see those invisible scars when we trust — which those very scars make so hard to do.
I enjoyed my visit to D’verse.
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February 1, 2017 at 12:57 pm
Wow! This is one amazing piece – as so many have said.
Stunning – simply stunning – the layers so wrapped up in each other and yet unfolding, opening like a flower blossom.
Truly – a great piece Lorraine – you should definitely mark this as a “keeper” moment. :D
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February 1, 2017 at 1:45 pm
Thanks — that’s high praise. I will mark it as a keeper. Probably should see if I have any other keepers, lol.
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February 1, 2017 at 7:28 pm
I’m sure you definitely do :)
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February 1, 2017 at 11:48 am
Lorraine, your Freudian slip is showing quite well here. 2nd ever Quadrille? You’re a natural. That being said, you write a powerful and compelling vision with so many layers to love. And I love them all. This is done so well!
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February 1, 2017 at 12:37 pm
Thank you, Walter. I am a free verser trying to be more concise so the Quadrille is a good mental exercise for me.
I’m so glad that you enjoyed how I put the words together. Sometimes the weave works better than others.
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February 1, 2017 at 2:07 pm
Don’t I know it, Lorraine! It’s like looming a fabric. If we don’t like a bit of it, we’ll unravel and redo! Either way, we’re writing!
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February 1, 2017 at 12:44 pm
I tried leaving a comment on your blog re your quadrille, but I’m having problems doing that so here is what I wrote:
I love the rhyme, rhythm and reason — the beat is strong, the message stronger.
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February 1, 2017 at 1:29 pm
Seemed to be a problem all around. My comment to yours was rejected three times, so I was surprised you had gotten it. Thanks for the kind words!
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February 1, 2017 at 7:29 am
I like the way you draw the contrast.
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February 1, 2017 at 8:07 am
Thank you. Thinking how we all bear some scars — the outer and the inner.
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February 1, 2017 at 12:05 am
Scars and wounds- maybe it’s the pain making it pleasure
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February 1, 2017 at 12:33 am
For some, that is definitely the case.
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January 31, 2017 at 10:49 pm
Nice ending ‘untouched…. in your arms’. Plenty of things said within the line
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January 31, 2017 at 10:51 pm
Thanks — wanted to make the last line count.
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January 31, 2017 at 10:54 pm
It worked. 😀. Another collaborative effort up as https://any1mark66.wordpress.com/2017/02/01/awash-in-clouds/?preview=true
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January 31, 2017 at 11:07 pm
Great — I’ve got several with overlapping lines, so might make it a po.em cycle.
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January 31, 2017 at 11:22 pm
Actually, the last time we used the same lines it came out as separate thoughts. Even starting on different lines in order, rearranges the mood of it. 😀
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February 1, 2017 at 12:37 am
Here is my first part of the new entity:
https://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com/2017/02/01/commentary-po-etry-after-the-fall/ is my po.em from the thread — think I have another one brewing.
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February 1, 2017 at 12:47 am
Really good. I like what you did with it! 😀
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February 1, 2017 at 1:22 am
Thanks — I’m working on a micro-burst.
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February 1, 2017 at 8:59 am
Those are great until the burst ends.. Careful the zombie battery my have eyes on you next. 😳
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February 1, 2017 at 9:01 am
My battery is bipolar 2 type — so zombie’s beware when I’m in hypomania posting mode/mood/manic
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February 1, 2017 at 9:08 am
I guess thats one of those energizer bunny things that keeps going and going…
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February 1, 2017 at 9:14 am
That’s great. You can feel the words. Nice picture too.
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January 31, 2017 at 10:18 pm
I love the images this evokes. Well done, Lorraine.
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January 31, 2017 at 10:25 pm
Thank you. :)
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January 31, 2017 at 5:22 pm
I liked the comparison of the scars on the wrist of one person to the scars hidden inside the other.
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January 31, 2017 at 7:38 pm
Thanks — I think we carry our scars differently based on who we are.
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January 31, 2017 at 5:13 pm
I like how you knitted so much into this poem. My favourite image is that of the “contours of my undulating scars”.
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January 31, 2017 at 7:40 pm
Thank you.
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January 31, 2017 at 4:23 pm
We are all scarred.
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January 31, 2017 at 4:36 pm
Perhaps that’s what makes us human.
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