More commentary po.etry created in comment stream between Mark and myself.
This is quite addicting — you should try it.
A washed in clouds
Thunder echoes within
Lightning strobes ‘crossbreeding sky
Arroyos want to taste their tears
Cracked lips moisten
Emptiness smiles like a vulture
Despondency it’s course
Longing its reason
Regret it’s will
Remote it’s undoing
Commentary poetry by Lorraine and myself. Her words are italicized. She has more of them that can be seen at https://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com
other examples of commentary po.ems