Created from the Sunday Whirl, December 25, 2016 and mlmm Wordle # 135 December 26, 2016. Done as a free write with minimal editing.
Sunday Whirl words: italics; word not used: banana
mlmm’ wordle words: bold
The sound of wind chimes drifted in; hung from the gutter of the eaves, the passel of notes could be impatiently heard over rumble of the railway terminal. Like a rum cull drunk on the wrap of his mistresses’ legs around his waist, she sang a glossy tune.
Of the fabric of her life before decline, before age discoloured and burnt. She rarely felt the slip of her mind now, the knife of madness chipping away at her ivoried tower. Each past stroke of the jackboot to her emotional gut melted. She merely placed her worn face in her chin and turned it towards the invisible sweetness of off-key wind chime notes gathering against her window pane.
© Lorraine
Lorraine's frilly freudian slip 
December 27, 2016 at 12:52 pm
Wow, your use of the words from both challenges creates a so achingly sad, yet so wonderfully told tale.
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December 27, 2016 at 9:13 pm
Thank you — I actually needed words from both to complete the tale — each was a partial picture.
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December 27, 2016 at 4:49 am
How beautifully and sadly your wrote of her slipping into dementia being obsessed with mundane and inconsquential things
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December 27, 2016 at 5:04 am
Thank you. Dementia takes no prisoners, I’m afraid. For some, the slide is without notice on their part. My mother never really realized how she was fading in a thousand ways.
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December 27, 2016 at 5:31 am
Alas, I can not comment on blogspot — technoproblems — enjoyed your multigenerational Christmas — the magic is in the young.
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December 26, 2016 at 3:26 pm
Nice feeling to this. Very concise and the mood is prefect
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December 26, 2016 at 3:34 pm
Thank you — I need the mix of whirl and wordle to get a full story. I was working for concise, so I’m glad it’s not too compact.
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December 26, 2016 at 4:01 pm
Concise is difficult to pull off. I try to cut words but is way to 2 easy to cut out what you intend to say. I get stuck in the thought I’m thinking and don’t realize I have left out something
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December 26, 2016 at 4:37 pm
I used to teach and drilled students on concise and compact — guess sometimes it sticks in my writing.
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December 26, 2016 at 5:01 pm
I think it’s easier if you visualize where is going. I had a goal of 25 words when I started with the wordles. The list really makes the biggest difference
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December 26, 2016 at 5:08 pm
A goal of words is interesting with a wordle. Although it’s usually flash, I have no set words in mind. I wait til I see links between the words, or get an opening or closing sentence.
Guess that’s what makes reading other folks stuff interesting — how they play with the words.
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December 26, 2016 at 5:39 pm
I think the words have a flow to them. I hope to bridge a couple and make the scene
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December 26, 2016 at 11:15 am
I love how, in your magic, in your creativity, you can take the words, find the essences, and with such simple statements, create a story that expresses just enough, without reams and reams of “unnecessary” details – the richness is astounding, the translation of emotions so encompassing!
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December 26, 2016 at 11:33 am
I like your stripped down flash fiction in Blood Diamonds — to keep the story to the core essence. With wordles, sometimes I try and be as sparse as possible, moving from word to word with little in between. Thank you for the encouraging comments.
My longer fiction (writing down the head stories) does have those reams of detail in places — when I stop and say, hey, guess I should say what so and so looks like, or how the concept of something works.
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December 26, 2016 at 11:41 am
Well I can totally appreciate your thought and working process, as much as your comment Lorraine :)
Sometimes it’s just what needs to be worked, as it is worked – and that’s part of the creativity at work and play, I guess.
And I do love a good challenge.
And I have to say, I also so love it when you “go the reams and reams” way too – I suspect it’s because I’m detail oriented myself … and as I’ve said, it depends on the work and the ideas floating around, right – so either way we work it, it’s all good. :)
And thanks for your thoughts on Blood Diamonds – normally I don’t like to use “qualifiers as explanations” at the end of my posts, but sometimes, it’s about the process as much as it is about the ideas being offered, whether it “works” or not. I guess it’s a bit like considering all of this the endless pages of sketches and sketches that the visual artists are usually scribbling out ;)
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