Eldmin held her tight about her waist – she could not breath against his strong arms. But he kept her upright for the next furies of pain. “Confess, confess, confess,” he whispered against the rush of blood in her ears, so his voice sounded as if on the other side of a waterfall. “Confess to what,” she pleaded. “To what,” she sobbed as the pain tore her skin from her bones. Again, he held her up, forced air into her lungs, life into her body. “Confess, confess, confess,” he commanded, his voice echoing loud inside her head like a clap of thunder. “To what,” she howled as her bones broke and crumbled. “To what,” she moaned as her spirit flowed out like her blood. Eldmin held her tight about her waist, but her body rocked forward. “Confess,” her wraith teased him, “Confess.”
Another stream of unconsciousness writing – the first sentence comes in a rush, like a tsunami of words. I try not to think and just let the words tumble and stumble onto the screen. Minimal editing, the raw writer’s cut, I guess for mlmm Photo Challenge # 144. image by: Natalia Drepina
December 26, 2016 at 10:55 pm
When you write as if it’s not part of you. A completely free of your normal editing brain
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December 26, 2016 at 11:00 pm
That’s a free write for me. I did academic writing before coming back to creative writing, so that pesky self-editor (and the teacher) tends to hang around. Means I edit as I write as much as I sit back and edit. Sitting back and editing is for submission/publication, word count, and continuity if I’m doing something episodic. Or I’m feeling iffy about what I wrote in the first place, lol.
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December 26, 2016 at 11:11 pm
I don’t submit much. I will edit if need be. I tend to rewrite rather than edit
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December 26, 2016 at 11:40 pm
A rewrite, for me, is a lot more work that editing.
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December 26, 2016 at 11:49 pm
My mind goes into overdrive. I start changing bits and then it becomes something else all together
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December 26, 2016 at 11:55 pm
Now I understand why the unraveling thread is such a dangerous thing. It unravels the story, and the story teller.
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December 27, 2016 at 12:29 am
Just the fabric of them. You can’t unravel the unbound writer
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December 27, 2016 at 12:38 am
May I quote “You can’t unravel the unbound writer” — I like that statement. You can be anon or whoever.
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December 27, 2016 at 8:26 am
Use me as you will. 😉
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December 27, 2016 at 8:32 am
Thank you — I use with abandon but always with acknowledgement — will anon do?
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December 27, 2016 at 1:09 pm
That is fine. I’m always happy to find something in words that makes sense to another🙂
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December 26, 2016 at 8:58 pm
Much so, Anonymously
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December 26, 2016 at 9:06 pm
I’m afraid you lost me here. It’s my “surprisingly early atrophied brain cells.”
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December 26, 2016 at 6:48 pm
The easy of revealing things when it’ll never be common thing
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December 26, 2016 at 7:48 pm
True — it’s who we reveal to, why and when.
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December 26, 2016 at 7:54 pm
Why is because we need to tell what’s inside, who is based on the reason we need to tell.
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December 26, 2016 at 8:01 pm
Very philosophical on a Monday night in December — must be the snow, or to quote an Emily Barker song, “despite the snow.”
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December 26, 2016 at 8:31 pm
I have been house bound. Well, maybe by choice
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December 26, 2016 at 8:35 pm
Being housebound at Christmas with family furry and flesh ain’t so bad.
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December 26, 2016 at 8:53 pm
There are worse places you could end up. Actually, peaceful is nice
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December 26, 2016 at 9:04 pm
Much worse. Cat didn’t look too happy but did you wear a Santa hat today?
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December 26, 2016 at 10:54 pm
No. My Santa hat wasn’t packed for the move West. I had to hide it in Ohio. The boss, she was overly bitch you about uniforms
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December 26, 2016 at 11:01 pm
Regulation head gear only?
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December 26, 2016 at 11:12 pm
only postal approved when the bitch is in
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December 26, 2016 at 11:39 pm
Guess Santa never worked for the postal service.
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December 26, 2016 at 11:48 pm
No. We have a really tight back ground church check. That North Pole address would be a problem with citizen question
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December 26, 2016 at 11:54 pm
True north strong and free belongs to Canada as much as the US and Russia would like it — although it actually isn’t a fixed point after all.
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December 27, 2016 at 12:28 am
See the back ground check is a problem. Hard to explain a street address without a fixed point. Funny but PO Boxes don’t count as an address
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December 27, 2016 at 12:37 am
Were going to superbox, no home delivery in Canada under Prime Minister Harper who lost last election.
Knew POs didn’t count cuz from forms and sweepstakes.
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December 27, 2016 at 8:23 am
We have shared boxes here. Anywhere between 6 and 15 addresses per box. In Ohio, it was only used in new developments. We have been given a second life as Amazon delivery people. There are peole who work Sunday just for Amazon packages
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December 27, 2016 at 8:33 am
Such is the day of the mega-corporation.
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December 27, 2016 at 1:50 pm
Less doing more. And less getting more
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December 26, 2016 at 8:04 pm
Philosophical and romantic.
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December 26, 2016 at 8:33 pm
definitely both. I think when the mind wonders, it finds common ground
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December 26, 2016 at 8:39 pm
True — like a free write.
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December 23, 2016 at 12:19 am
Depending on the mini series, it could have been 1600’s or 2011 after they mistook the cast of Twilight as real creatures instead of people
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December 23, 2016 at 12:53 am
Of course, the other things done to witches were pretty gruesome and permanent too.
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December 23, 2016 at 8:23 am
Burning at the stake is just a historical view of the smoker who quit and now on a crusade against people who smoke. Or maybe the intent was to lock then in a barn and that New England accent made it sound like burn….People do get carried away in a crowd
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December 23, 2016 at 8:27 am
Yeah, and the stoning, and the crushing under a board, and the hanging with stones on their feet — all just plain fun that got outta hand.
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December 23, 2016 at 4:38 pm
My first wife was Wiccan. They did a lot more than that. Actually, the doctors first targeted midwives. They were more successful than the doctors (glorified butchers) were. The doctors accused them of being witches and selling the soul of the babies to the devil. Thus more of their babies lived.
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December 23, 2016 at 4:56 pm
Oh yeh — there was a large target group for being deemed witch and no way to prove you weren’t except by basically dying.
Interesting that you married a Wiccan.
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December 23, 2016 at 5:14 pm
I tend to avoid being routine. Even my choices in women, scary as they are looking back, have provided me new ways of thinking.
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December 23, 2016 at 5:23 pm
Then you chose well in the long term — even if not in the short.
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December 23, 2016 at 11:03 pm
Well, I have only relocated across country once. So I haven’t had to out run any of my past. 😊
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December 23, 2016 at 11:40 pm
Only one really long distance runaway east coast to west coast — rest were shorter.
Luck you haven’t had to out run your past.
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December 23, 2016 at 11:51 pm
I don’t remember all of it. So my demons may still be with me. We could get along really well and they might be well tempered
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December 24, 2016 at 4:14 am
True, not all demons are ill-behaved, and what you accept as your “norm,” others might see as more demonic . . . .
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December 24, 2016 at 8:24 am
You can say that again. I prefer the Non OCD ones. I’m not a drama person
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December 24, 2016 at 12:27 pm
Can’t see you as a drama queen. or king.
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December 24, 2016 at 5:19 pm
Nobody has so far…
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December 24, 2016 at 7:22 pm
Wishing you all the best of this festive season — here’s to eggnog goes well with bourbon.
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December 25, 2016 at 12:53 pm
Merry Christmas, darling! I’m having a white Christmas. I don’t do eggnog. But have my bourbon to melt any snow that falls.
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December 25, 2016 at 1:55 pm
As long as your bourbon melts the snow. We’re having a brown Christmas with more rain (much needed) on the way. Last year, the temp was almost 70, this year will be almost 60 — not the norm.
Really — is it snowing in paradise?
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December 25, 2016 at 2:09 pm
I walked the last two years in shorts in Ohio and then it went to hell. This year is different out here. The snow is rapidly melting. First time in seven years there was snow on Christmas
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December 25, 2016 at 2:16 pm
Can’t remember a white Christmas — been a long time. Not good sign.
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December 25, 2016 at 2:22 pm
Every other one was in Ohio. But Lake Erie provided snow easy in December through March
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December 25, 2016 at 7:56 pm
Good old lake effect snow. Haven’t heard about that in a while.
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December 25, 2016 at 9:10 pm
I haven’t seen it in about 8 months. It’s like am open wound that festers for five months.
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December 26, 2016 at 4:52 am
Used to live in lake effect snow zones, so get the festering wound idea.
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December 26, 2016 at 1:55 pm
I’m looking forward to the risk of sun burn
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December 26, 2016 at 2:33 pm
Bets blizzard burn any time.
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December 26, 2016 at 2:36 pm
Yes it does. I’m hoping this is a rare event
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December 26, 2016 at 2:51 pm
As rare as the Great Lakes freezing over these days?
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December 26, 2016 at 3:21 pm
Lake Erie will mostly freeze over in January or February for a month to six weeks. I won’t be that cold here. Yesterday the high was 35. That’s really cold here. ☺
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December 26, 2016 at 3:36 pm
I’m not sure how much of Lake Ontario freezes (one I’m most familiar with) but upper Michigan will or should.
We were warmer than you — around 50. Today, 39 and drizmal.
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December 26, 2016 at 4:04 pm
Lake Ontario doesn’t freeze over. It’s too deep and more wave action. But that leaves lake effect open all winter. I dated someone from Syracuse and they would get heavy snow in February with bitter cold
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December 26, 2016 at 4:38 pm
We used to live across from up-state NY so know all about how the snow pulls up.
Any where you haven’t dated a girl from? Just kidding.
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December 26, 2016 at 5:02 pm
I have keep to the Midwest. Everyone whee had an accent. It’s hard enough to make sense of the female mind when you speak the same. 😉
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December 26, 2016 at 5:10 pm
But accents/dialects are the spice.
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December 26, 2016 at 5:41 pm
There are interesting. the different words usage makes for great interplay.
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December 26, 2016 at 6:09 pm
I could say and foreplay, but I won’t.
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December 26, 2016 at 6:12 pm
There’s the difference of fling and much more. You’ll say more generally if it’s all in good fun
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December 26, 2016 at 6:26 pm
True — more does have it cache.
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December 22, 2016 at 11:33 pm
The treatment of witches has improved since they have banned tying them to stones and throwing then in rivers
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December 23, 2016 at 12:17 am
When was that — 1962? (TiC)
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December 21, 2016 at 7:09 am
Such pain and sadness and madness.
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December 21, 2016 at 8:12 am
For some reason, that’s the vibe I got off the picture.
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